BITE
by Bryan Borland
He tells me to use my teeth,
scrape the skin just barely,
just enough to
make him feel it.
This from the boy who caught me like a hungry fish
on his shiny, perfect hook,
the minnow who swam like dinner in my bedroom oceans,
luring me with rubescent cheeks above and below,
the one who stood out
in schools of leaders and followers,
traveling, colorful clouds of tumbling positions.
This from the gentle boy whose quickening currents
I’d fought to slow into liquid forgetfulness
with nibbles so near to the back of his neck,
my stealthy arms drifting toward but never to, never around
his river-strong body.
This from the quiet boy washed to me
dripping and naked but safe and willing
along my crooked coastline,
carried along by my pleas for the pronunciation of pain
to float from his fluid vocabulary.
This from the trophy boy I saved from drowning,
into whose depths I’d so often dreamt
not of plunging piston-like with steam rising in
a delta vapor of swampy lust,
but of sinking sweetly and slowly to the bottom
with the carefulness of a trickling southern stream,
soft and with love.
This after he and I together tread bodies of sun-warmed water
undiscovered by all, untouched by any man,
the same boy with me as we reach the surface and gasp for air,
when there’s not an inch of dry land in sight,
it is this boy who turns from tadpole to shark
and tells me
make it hurt.
© Bryan Borland
Acknowledgement: This poem appeared in the 9th issue of Breadcrumb Scabs and in the January 2010 issue of Ganymede. It also appears in My Life as Adam.
Jeeze- you weren’t gone but, what, a week, and you come back with this delicious sucker punch? Love it.
Thanks Tel! Ya know, I had a hunch you’d appreciate this one! This is one I’ve been working on for a while… still not sure it’s exactly where I want it to be, but it’s getting there.
It’s a kind of combination of lyric beauty and fierce sensuality in your poetry that makes it unique and special, Bryan. Every line has an original idea perfectly expressed. The ending to this one is so sudden and unexpected it rings like a bell in the mind.
alright are you really back now… I want to put you back on the blogroll, but afraid you’ll leave again…
a lot of three syllable words as some of my coworkers would say… sucker punch to the avid poetry reader, perhaps rich the little guy. you have evolved up in the writing world!!! Nice work Bryan…. Cindy
You know I love this because I love any reference to making something hurt.
I was a little uneasy about posting this one… it’s not pretty, but then sex isn’t always pretty, right? Things don’t always unravel as we expect. I was reminded, though, as my friend Paul wrote, “There should be no purity in poetry.” I wanted the end to be biting.
Cindy, I appreciate your comments more than you know. When I hit publish, I honestly thought, “What is Cindy gonna think?” This in comparison to your Godly, peaceful poetry, and then here’s this crude ode to rough lust? My apprehension was unfounded and my fear gave you too little credit. You are a gem. I’m not going anywhere. I’ve got my submission routine in gear and I’m at my best when I am constantly producing first drafts here.
Paul, you continue to inspire me daily. The amount of energy and creative spirit you drive out into the world, into us, daily, is overwhelming, in a good way.
Thanks!
Oh Bryan,
you make me laugh… I’ll give you a tip, we all live in the same world. honestly. I don’t sit in church all day… in fact, that’s my pitch, to get people to be real between that seperation. we just have different angles… thanks for thinking of me!!
I know this is a draft, and the only reason I made a crack about the 3 syllable words… is for your market audience. I know your writing with thoughts of publishing, and am offering insight in how it reads… in a godly way…
you have moved up from mainstream reading, which is fabulous, if that is what you’re after. I don’t know what your goals are.
FYI… I am a personal fan of lust. how else do you meet someone special??? Ha! cindy
Cindy, I love that! If it didn’t take so much effort I’d rename this site “Three Syllable Words!”
Writing with thoughts of publishing…. daydreams, really. But I figured if I didn’t submit anything it would never happen.
I’d venture to guess blogging is more fun than publishing, anyway, and probably more rewarding with the instant-feedback, but I gotta say, those $1,000 prizes would sure make paying off this fancy new computer easier!
You are awesomeness incarnate. I am glad you visit my site and I am glad I have the privilege to visit yours.
awesomeness incarnate?? there you go again… I have to work in the real world, Bryan, if you get me talking ‘up’ like that NO ONE will understand me!!!
J/K… I want you to soar like the eagle you are!
note… there are better payouts than poetry prizes.. think outside the box on publishing, your work is good enough. cindy
Absolutely AMAZING!!!!
I keep wondering, every time I say, “this is one of my favorites,” if it loses any value.
I think not… Bryan, this is one of my favorites! I love the ending, very ‘biting.’
Thanks LaMar! Say “this is one of my favorites” all you want. It never gets old.
Love the ‘This from the boy’ contrast. I was about to say how much I like the ‘erotic’ energy of many of your poems, only to wonder whether ‘physical’ might be a better term. You’re constantly tweaking our eroticized language, at the same time that you create very vivid images, both through words and imagination. Anyway, good work again.
That was a little hotter than I was ready for. I just stopped in to see if you were really back. I guess you are. I remember being young enough to enjoy it hurting … not so much anymore, but it was good reading and recalling. SSSSSSSSSSSteaming.
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